My barista friend told me I was writing my scenes wrong and she was right
I was at a coffee shop in Portland last Tuesday killing time before my shift and my friend Lena, who works there, asked what I was working on. I told her I was stuck on a scene where two characters have an argument over a broken fence. She read a paragraph and said "you're telling me what they feel instead of showing what they do. Nobody cares about the fence, they care about who flinches first." That one sentence made me rewrite the whole chapter and it actually flows now. I started watching real conversations at her shop and noticed people never say "I'm angry" they just slam a mug down or stop making eye contact. Has anyone else had a random person outside writing give you advice that totally flipped your process?